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augmenti ([personal profile] augmenti) wrote2011-01-12 11:30 pm

ss501; baby blues

Baby Blues.
In which babies are frightening.
→about 400 words. Hyunjoong/Kyujong; Pg.




Blue eyes caught his gaze, more spectacular and bright than the sky on a clear summer day. He stared at the baby; a cup of coffee held in each hand, and the baby stared up at him from his crib. It had creamy white skin and flushed cheeks. Nearly white hair fluffed at the top of his head and he sucked on the rattle in his pudgy little hands.

There was a moment, Kyujong was sure that the baby felt it too, where they both looked at each other in complete surprise, sizing each other up. Then Kyujong smiled, and wrinkled his nose, and the baby broke into the kind of smile only a baby can give—pure, untainted, and innocent.

He felt an odd tugging on the center of his chest, as though he were being propelled forward even while his feet remained anchored to the ground. He felt like he were sinking under shifting sands of a sinkhole the moment he broke contact with the bright blue eyes of the infant.

He was going to fall right through the floor in some invisible wormhole in a coffee shop and no one was going to notice but the baby, who was still giggling around the rattle in his mouth. His throat constricted even though all he wanted to do was open his mouth and scream help me at the top of his lungs, even though doing so would cause him to drown from sand.

Then a hand touched his shoulder, bringing him back to reality with a snap. The vision disappeared in one fell swoop. Then Hyunjoong’s laughter rang in his ears. “What’s the matter? You look like you’ve seen a ghost.”

His leader’s smile pulled his cheeks up in a way that almost mimicked the baby’s. “It’s nothing,” he said, handing him his coffee and shouldering his way out of the doorway.

It was a small signal, playing at the back of his mind. It stuck itself there with super glue and refused to leave him. A child, his mind told him. Hyunjoong would want a child, too. He smiled at himself cynically and twisted his fingers through Hyunjoong’s for a brief moment before letting go because they were in public, and it wouldn’t be right.

“You’re like a kid,” he told Hyunjoong when he gave him a bemused glance.

“I know.” A cocky smile greeted him like a blow to the back of the head. Hyunjoong would be a devilish father.

[identity profile] countrymir.livejournal.com 2011-01-13 10:18 am (UTC)(link)
lovely fic. at first i was thrown off by the suddenly panicking and extremely dark tone it quickly took. and you managed to then explain it with just one line. really amazing, that was. it was a great read and i like how you basically told me all i needed to know and it was enough for this fic.

[identity profile] augmenti.livejournal.com 2011-01-13 03:21 pm (UTC)(link)
thank you! i actually wrote this to try and get a handle on syntax, and how it can affect works, make them better, change the tone, etc. so i'm glad it worked for you. thanks for reading!♥♥

[identity profile] yeonah.livejournal.com 2011-01-14 02:07 am (UTC)(link)
I SEE YOU THAR =D

LOLOL Poor KyuJong...

At first I was wondering what he was so scared about, because that baby's CUTE, but then it was like...oh, HyunJoong...that makes sense =( /clings to him

And I'd be scared for any child HyunJoong had LOL

<33333

[identity profile] augmenti.livejournal.com 2011-01-14 04:16 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah I was trying to say what Kyujong was afraid of without actually saying it, lol. Thank you so much for reading. How did I do?

[identity profile] yeonah.livejournal.com 2011-01-14 12:52 pm (UTC)(link)
You did great~!!!! XD It's a very intuitive piece, and I love how you subtly point out that it's not the baby himself Kyu's scared of, but what that would mean to HyunJoong, and mean to their relationship.

And HyunKyu isn't a common pairing, so you get bonus points LOL <333

WELCOME TO GYONGGO~!!!!!

[identity profile] augmenti.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:11 am (UTC)(link)
thank you! i'm glad it got through to you in the end :) it's not? it seems like it would be, but then, what do i know? i'm sorry it's the one i promised you 9879789797 years ago lol. thanks for the warm welcome!

[identity profile] nadz144.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 12:52 am (UTC)(link)
new to gyongo? me too. high five?lol.

it's short, simple and sweet. I love how you wrote this fic. The subtlety is beautiful.

And yeah, HyunJoong would be a devilish father. XD

[identity profile] augmenti.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:12 am (UTC)(link)
yay! n00b party! \o/! thank you, i'm so glad you like it! i actually think he'd be a very sweet father, but i don't really know much about that kind of stuff, lol!

[identity profile] nadz144.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:20 am (UTC)(link)
n00b party? Yay! I'll blow up the balloons. lol.

Yeah, I think he'll make a good father but sort of unique in his own way. The kid would be so lucky. XD.

Mind if I add you as a friend?

[identity profile] augmenti.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:23 am (UTC)(link)
\o/ woot! yeah, same here. i'm just making this up based off how he treats his other members as leader lolol. sure, but this is just my writing journal. my personal journal is here (http://kitkii.livejournal.com) :D can i add you back? :D

[identity profile] nadz144.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:40 am (UTC)(link)
Sure, you can add me back. I'm new here in LJ so some things in LJ confuses me.

I'll just add both journals, is that ok?

(mooommyy! I made a new friend!) lol.

[identity profile] augmenti.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:43 am (UTC)(link)
Really? Welcome to lj then! :D That's fine, I'll add you to both! :D

[identity profile] nadz144.livejournal.com 2011-01-15 01:51 am (UTC)(link)
ok. Thnks. X)